What Jergens Hand Soap Can Teach You About Crafting Compelling Copy

What Jergens Hand Soap Can Teach You About Crafting Compelling Copy

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  1. So true. Do it all the time. Reminds me of the scene in the movie Kingpin where the characters argue over which product to bring into the bathroom to read. 🙂

  2. James,

    you’re dead on.
    I actually hate the fact that I analyze all this stuff now.

    And not to stray to far off the subject, but I noticed that one of the major hair shampoo manufacturers has the woman eating dark chocolate (and probably moaning like she’s having sex…) while whipping her hair around on a new commercial- obviously appealing to any senses they can.

    I’m sure it’s very successful. I felt like jumping my wife after it was over.

    She however, must not have been watching it.

  3. You can really read anything. It doesn’t just have to be textbooks or anything like that. Just reading anything can help you become a better blogger altogether. You can see I got stuck on the reading part.

  4. Rub your hands on your arms for the right reasons. NO-Squito, softens skin while repelling insects. Mosquitos may hate the scent, but it will make your spouse want to shuffle the kids to bed.

  5. This is a pretty hilarious post! True, but funny. I like Writer Dad’s comment as well.

    Way to go with the Mosquito Repellant. Although sweet smelling repellant probably wouldn’t actually work against the mosquitos. 🙂

  6. I’ve actually been doing this lately. It started when I was researching an article for my blog regarding deceptive product labels. But then I realized, hey, these guys are awesome writers. They get across in 20 words or less what I sometimes fail to do in 500. Truly amazing.

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  8. It’s a trick to find your insect repellent bottle for a product name without actually looking at the rest of the bottle!

    When you’re on the go, another stop is the last thing you need. Off Active insect repellent stays on your active body longer to keep you going strong. Never stop for bugs.

  9. I think the Tabasco company had a brilliant commercial with the man who at food with their sauce and then a mosquito landed on him, flew away, and then the mosquito burst into flames. With that in mind…here is a man-ly insect repellent.

    You hate mosquitoes. You wish they would all DIE! Mos-killer lotion will take care of that problem in under 2 seconds.

    It buzzes around your face….
    It lands on skin…
    It screams bloody murder…
    It DIES…

    Revenge never sounded so sweet.

    [hey, it was fun to write.]

  10. Writer Dad seriously had me on my way to the drugstore.

    I suck at this kind of writing so much, it’s hilarious. It’s all about translating a product into an experience, I think. That’s probably why I got into the relationship marketing gig, I can’t confine myself to three sentences to save my life. 😉

    Love the observation about cereal boxes, and absolutely, I must have spent hours and hours poring instensely over them.

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  12. Oh, man, I was going to say I’m an inveterate cereal box reader! I totally annoy everyone around me with how much I blow a gasket about bad packaging and want to buy something in great packaging simply because the packaging is great… doesn’t matter whether I even need the item.

    Here’s my mosquito repellant copy:

    That pine scent that arises as you smooth Bugz-away on your skin is a warning to little bloodsuckers everywhere: STAY AWAY. Apply some confidence to your skin and spend more time outdoors with the ones you love.

  13. The advertising that always gets me is in restaurants. Instead of pasta with cheese and nuts, it’s warm, tender artisan bowties with aromatic organic goat cheese mingling with toasted fall pine nuts. Works everytime to up my entree by $20 or so 🙂

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  15. I’m with Michael; I’m all for reading cereal boxes, especially ones with the fun games. 🙂 Seriously though, now that I’ve gone through several of my washy-products, a few of them DO make themselves sound good enough to eat. Except for one. It tells me to lather and repeat. No rinsing. Just lathering and repeating. I thought that was pretty funny.

  16. I share HowtoCope’s fascination with menu copy. My favorite is Carrow’s “country carved ham.”

    I’m still not sure what “city carved ham” would be, but it sure sounds less appetizing.

    I’m also waiting for the day I can find “urban fresh eggs.”

    And how is creamery buttery different from regular butter? Oh, the questions.

  17. Wow! The brain behind those ad promo must be rich now. Kidding aside, I really admire advertising people who can think of short but strong promo statements. They must be really good in convincing others.

    One promo ad that I cannot forget is the one from LEVI’s that really suits their character and respected name – Quality never goes out of style!

  18. I love the challenge of having to condense complex ideas into a few words, like writing Flash messages on a homepage. A lot of web writing is like that, you don’t have much screen real estate to work with a lot of the time. It’s really the work of the poet.

    Ah…the good ol days of cereal boxes!

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  20. In answer to that challenge, here’s my attempt.

    Mosquito repellant: It doesn’t kill em’ dead, but the skeeters avoid you like it might. It’s like wearing a sign the insect can read which exclaims, “the buffet is closed!” No more irritations, and easy to apply!

  21. I’m not sure I want to admit to all the time I’ve spent staring at the bottles of hair products lining my bathroom shelf, but it’s true, they sell what amounts to a mix of chemicals you’d find in some anti-freeze and convince you it will cure hereditary oiliness or revive hair that’s long dead.

    That happens to be a really nice hand soap, btw. 🙂

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  23. Thanks Pete!

    You know, I don’t think I’ve ever read a label that actually mentioned the symptoms of what you’re trying to cure/avoid.

    Can you imagine a kid’s cereal doing something like that?

    “Give your little anklebiters a shot of supercharged sugar frosted fake fruit bits and send them tearing out the door to wreck havoc at school while you relax and enjoy eight hours of tranquility and peace.”

    Wait a second.. I think I have to go buy some of that stuff 🙂

  24. Have a carefree day in your own mosquito-free zone.

    Productname is a fresh smelling, easy to apply, long lasting non-greasy lotion.

    Now you can forget about mosquitos, you can enjoy the outdoors more.

  25. Interesting co-relation between the copy & the reader’s senses!
    Thanks for highlighting something we usually don’t realise.

  26. My mosquito repellent copy:

    NEVER BE BITTEN AGAIN. That’s right…just one application of Organic Mosquito Killer means you’ll be mosquito-free all night long — without poisoning yourself in the process. We guarantee it.

  27. I love reading the sentences in the household products, stationery to learn the good and not so good points as well.
    It always amazes me on the power of words on psychology of selling.
    How cool this is…
    *James: Tks for sharing


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  31. Enjoy the gentle hospitality of a Southern summer night without the gnawing irritation of mosquitos and no-see-ems. One spritz of Freshair will leave your skin feeling smooth, clear, and protected, leaving you to discover that hidden pocket of time between the glare of day and the shadow of night, bug free.

    Great exercise. Now if you’ll excuse me, I feel the urge wash my hands.

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